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You believe you
speak of truth
yet all I see
is contradiction.
Your acid tongue
lashes out,
leaving boils
on my skin
for every single
word you've spoken.

These lies
you tell
cannot provide
redemption.
You can only
manufacture
so much of
your own reality
before you're
forced to
break mirrors
just to save face.

-Brian Shuffett
June 29th, 2010
I know that I can turn you on,
I wish I could just turn you off;
I never wanted this.
-Marilyn Manson; Mister Superstar
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:iconprettyflour:
prettyflour Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This has been featured in the :iconpoeticalcondition: blog!

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Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
"before you're/forced to/break mirrors/just to save face." :aww: Love that ending!
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
Thanks hun!
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Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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Valchryst Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Great, the truth cannot be corrupted, and yet there are so many that push lies and tell you to shut up when you prove them wrong
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
True indeed!
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Miss-Tbones Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
:thumbsup:
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2010
:ahoy:
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Miss-Tbones Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
:lol:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
That last section especially, was point on! Love that ending! Great piece as a whole as well.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2010
Thank you so much!
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:iconasimpleartlover:
ASimpleArtLover Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2010
that's an interesting train of thought, "break mirrors to save faces." it feels like there could be so much more too it, but my mind fails to grasp the possibilities.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2010
Thank you!
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BakuSpirit Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2010  Hobbyist
Response : [link]

mentioned "Fallacious" in the artist's comments box(with link)
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LostWithinDreams Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2010
On behalf of #The-Writers-Review:

A very good poem. I love the motif of contradict between two people. A very nice way to show it, too. Yes, this poem is a little bit more negative than usual, but I think negativity is good in poetry sometimes. The last stanza really hits home. Great job, again, and I do hope you submit more poetry to this group in the future. :]
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2010
Thank you so much!
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:iconlostwithindreams:
LostWithinDreams Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2010
you're very welcome! :]
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Kamal-Q Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
"You can only
manufacture
so much of
your own reality
before you're
forced to
break mirrors
just to save face. "

:thumbsup: maybe even the truth from old lovers is as good as false simply cause it comes from them
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010
Indeed! Thank you Kamal!
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DasGhul Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010   General Artist
This reminds me of myself.
I just love it! :love:
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010
Thank you~
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:iconheartsneverbreak:
HeartsNeverBreak Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010
This reminds me of my ex best friend. ):

Awesome job!
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010
Thank you!
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:iconheartsneverbreak:
HeartsNeverBreak Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010
No problem
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Suicide-On-A-Stick Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
before you're
forced to
break mirrors
just to save face.

Fucking amazing, your work always inspires me!
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010
Thank you! I truly appreciate that!
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Suicide-On-A-Stick Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
No problem at all!
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DanielDGriffiths Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010   Writer
Expertly written - I particularly liked:
'forced to
break mirrors
just to save face'
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Thank you Daniel! I truly appreciate it! :ahoy:
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Student Writer
<3 I love the last stanza.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Thank you!

:glomp:
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Student Writer
You're welcome. <3
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Caity-Kitten Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010   Writer
I really like the first line and how read on it's own has a different meaning than when you place it with teh next line (slightly anyway) I really like that choice of ilne break, and as an opening line it really draws the reader in. I lvoe the way both parts sound and the use of punctution and ilne breaks in this was relly good. The only thing I didn't like was how ti felt like two completely different poems.

From the founder of #The-Writers-Review
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Thanks hun! I appreciate the input!
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Caity-Kitten Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2010   Writer
welcomes as always ^^
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PaintTheSkyRed Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Nice work. I enjoyed it.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Thank you!
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PaintTheSkyRed Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome. c:
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LoveDestructive Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Student Writer
I love the ending line. Attitude!
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Thank you my sister from another mister!
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LoveDestructive Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Student Writer
Ahahahaha. Okay, brother from a different mother!
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Muahahaha!
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LoveDestructive Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Student Writer
Can I get a hug? :iconsadnessplz:
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
:icondragonhug:

:iconspazhugplz:
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LoveDestructive Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you. :iconcryingplz:
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dragnixcatc Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
:iconthe-writers-review:

i like thelow of this peice And I like the last stanza too. To me it is the most powerful. Great job :la:

CatC
The Writer's Review
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Thank you so much!
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dragnixcatc Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome n.n
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MichaelOrtega Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010   Traditional Artist
naturally done very nice
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Thank you Michael!
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