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I recall the
night when
I no longer
felt at peace
when your
skin brushed
against mine.

Such a subtle
coldness lingered,
deterred my
hollow heart
from beating.

The Heaven
that dwelled
within us
simply died.
I could see
Hell from
my window;
I closed the
curtain and
said farewell.

-Brian Shuffett
October 17th, 2010
I miss her, but nothing lasts forever.

Gehenna: a place or state of misery
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:iconcreekprincess:
CreekPrincess Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010   Writer
Wow. So beautifully written yet so painful to feel with you.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2010
Thanks!

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TheDownpour Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010
Wow - that is an amazing and moving piece - really emotional and atmospheric; especially in the second stanza. Fantastic piece :)
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010
Thank you so much!
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TheDownpour Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010
You're welcome :D It was a really good poem, I can't stress that enough.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010
:ahoy:
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TheDownpour Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2010
:D :ahoy:
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Revelations5-5 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2010
Lovely as always! :heart: The title is alluring too.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2010
Thank you so much!

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ArtSoul777 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2010
Powerful in it's honesty & emotion :heart:
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010
Thank you! :glomp:
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ArtSoul777 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010
my pleasure :heart:
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samsam594 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh this is VERY good!! :)
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Thank you dear!
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PearlOfGreatPrice Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
Very very nice. Your prose just gets better and better!
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Thank you dear!
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
Very haunting and lovely.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Thank you so much!

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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2010
You're welcome.
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TwistedAnger Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: evokes the loss and the misery
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Thank you dear!
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TwistedAnger Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
most welcome hon :)
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ElyzeTav Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010
aw, Its really sad, but I like it, Especially the title =)
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Thank you!
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Obsidian-Nightfall Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010  Student Writer
I completely understand this piece my friend, and certainly can relate. You express what torments you so well with your unique, minimalist style. At uni my lecturer is encouraging us to write more like this aha... Well done on this piece Brian...
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Thank you so much Dominic!
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Obsidian-Nightfall Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Student Writer
My pleasure...
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
A beautifully emotional poem, the last line is just superb
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Thank you dear! :glomp:
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Most welcome!
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love-shakspeare Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I really love it. I'm sorry you miss her.:hug: Happy early Birthday by the way!:)
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
Thank you!
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love-shakspeare Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!:heart:
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SalemCat Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really good Brian, in fact I would have to say excellent and something I can relate too..
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
Thanks Debbie! I truly appreciate it!
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SalemCat Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
You're most welcome Brian! :hug:
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Vellaroque Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
very meaningful poem.and if it's based on your real life situation, yea i feel you.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
Thank you!

Definitely based on my real life experiences. Had we stayed together, I'd be living 2,100 miles from here now. Sometimes things just don't work out. :(
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Vellaroque Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
*sigh* i know rite.
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Winding-Silence Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
It's concise (I think is the word) but really emotive. Fantastic work again :).
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
Thank you!
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RAtakol Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
it is a nice poem dear Brain:))
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
Thank you dear!
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AfterDeath Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow very good
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
Thank you!
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MichaelOrtega Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010   Traditional Artist
A terrific poem...very lovely!
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
Thanks Michael!
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FicktionPhotography Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Huh, I've experienced this same feeling. I can't help but like it because it captures that moment and encapsulates it beautifully. Well done!
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
Thank you dear!
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ASimpleArtLover Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010
I knew wht Gehenna was! i feel special.
I am very happy that you are moving on. It can only get better from here!
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