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A watchful eye
lingers in your
corner, dwelling
upon the essence
of your elegance.

Oh lustrous deity,
a fear encompasses
my weary heart,
a fear that you will
distance yourself
from my open door.

So swiftly does the
wind blow it shut,
forever blinding me;
no longer may I
behold thy beauty.

-Brian Shuffett
July 30th, 2010
For once I would like to see something become what I wish it were to be. How egotistical of me, yes! However, is it so wrong to wish for companionship, to have someone there by your side? My heart is not so black that it merits an eternity of solitude.

Man's reach exceeds his grasp.
-Nikola Tesla

Tonight my head is full of wishes
and everything I drink is full of her.
-Katatonia; Tonight's Music
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crimsha Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010
you need a compilation; a book to sell! i think it would do very, very good.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
Thank you! I'm actually compiling one as we speak!
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crimsha Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2010
cool! yay!
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mellowghost Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the way you've expressed yourself in this poem.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
Thank you!
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AgelessVampire17 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Truly beautiful. I could just feel the of this poem pulling at me, I liked how it ended. Simply amazing
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2010
Thank you so much!
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AgelessVampire17 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Keep it up
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PeacefulSoul Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
I don't use this word/phrase much but, I see a little de ja vu in the part where it talks about how swiftly the wind blows wide open doors shut, and how painstaking that can be when it happens, when someone feels they're not welcome within them, when in fact [they are].

I thank you for sharing this poem. It's worded simplisticly and know were this is coming from.

I am accepting this to the Group!
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2010
Thank you so much!
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Knifapotamas Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
<3 Nice work on this piece. ;D I like.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010
Thank you so much!
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:iconknifapotamas:
Knifapotamas Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:3 Anytime. ;D
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:iconbrunette-from-oz:
brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010   General Artist
That's awesome. AS for the topic...it's a never-ending story of "search and destroy", in my opinion.
Look at what a great writer this yearning is causing you to be! :-)


The very nature of mankind! :hug:
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010
Thank you so much!
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:iconbrunette-from-oz:
brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010   General Artist
You deserve accolade!
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joshwlt Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
yes.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
:ahoy:
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rocky-loves-emily Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
The first stanza is great, "dwelling/ upon the essence/ of your elegance" wonderful.

And to answer your question, no it is not wrong to wish for companionship and someone to be just be there. Who doesn't lay under the covers for fifteen minutes after the alarm clock has gone off and wish there was someone there to nudge their lazy ass out of bed. :D
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
Thank you!

:icondragonglomp:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
A poet's pen may shape the world....
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
:glomp:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
Nikola Tesla was the man.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
Indeed! I loved David Bowie's portrayal of him in The Prestige.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010
My sister keeps telling me I have to watch that movie, she loves Victorian times, magicians and especially Tesla. To my chagrin I haven't seen it yet, haha.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010
It is amazing! I can't tell you how many countless times I've viewed it, and it never gets old!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010
Ah I so have to give it a try now :)
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XtransylvanianX Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
"For once I would like to see something become what I wish it were to be. How egotistical of me, yes! However, is it so wrong to wish for companionship, to have someone there by your side? My heart is not so black that it merits an eternity of solitude. "

This. This is what I whisper to myself every night.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
:glomp:
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XtransylvanianX Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
Ha ha. Thanks. <3
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Johnray Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
hey hey - there is nothing egotistical about wanting smoething the way you want it to be. it's alright, don't be afraid or insecure about how you feel, after all it is your actions that count. why not try and make things you want happen rather than just hoping? inaction leads to insecurity leads to not trying and the cycle downward begins.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
True indeed!
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samsam594 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh! amazing! and I hope you get what you want and I hope it becomes what you want! Because with such talent as you have you deserve it!
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
Thank you Sammy! :glomp:
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brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010   General Artist
Well, I think the poem is an emotion in words and has little to do with your comments where you were kinda adding afterthoughts to yourself. Your theme, to me, seems to be how quickly our impressions disappear when we are gone out of someone's life.
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brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010   General Artist
I think I addressed my comment to the wrong deviant! :-)
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
Thank you! I truly appreciate the input! It was written very quick, in a matter of three minutes to be precise. I often go back and edit my poems, and I will keep your suggestions in mind when I do.
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ASimpleArtLover Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
aw, man this is good! its language speaks of times long past, but the feeling and tone are universal and transcend the ages.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
Thank you so much dear!

:icondragonglomp:
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ASimpleArtLover Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
that's a wicked emote.
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
I love this one too...

:icondragonhug:
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ASimpleArtLover Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010
gah! i love it!
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Esherymack Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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hmmm... i want to leave a comment, but i can't think of anything to say.....

:tux:
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:iconbshuffett:
bshuffett Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
Meaning you think it's bad or you think it's good?
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Esherymack Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i like it! xD i was saying i'm speechless.

:tux:
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Kamal-Q Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
a natural human desire - though I find the title fascinating
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